Writing Narrative Assessment - 14 December 2016

Learner:  Darren    Learning Coach: Megan Croll - LH2        Date:14 December 2016

Learning Area:  Writing

Learning Observed

Following our trip to the Auckland Zoo, we decided to learn how to write a letter so that we could thank the helpers.   Darren and his hapu group brainstormed the people that helped us and all the animals that they saw.  Darren chose to write to me.   He started his letter with the date and the name of the person that he was writing to.  Next, he wrote about the purpose for the letter and what he liked the most.    In Darren’s draft copy, he used capital letters for the beginning of his sentences, wrote high frequency words correctly and followed the structure for writing a letter.  With support from his Learning Coach, he corrected the spelling of more difficult words, e.g fantastic, tortoise.

Evidence of learning

This is Darren’s published piece of writing.

Key Competencies/Vision Principles

Darren is demonstrating that he is: Collaborative - sharing his ideas with his hapu group during a brainstorm session about what they liked the most about their trip to Auckland Zoo. Capable - independently choosing who he wished to write to and what he wanted to write about. Using Language, Symbols and Text - writing many high frequency words correctly and taking care to write the size and shape of most letters correctly.

Next Learning Steps

Use full stops at the end of every sentence Include more information about his ideas Practise writing letters at home

Narrative Assessment - Writing - 22 September 2016

Learner: Darren       Learning Coach: Megan Croll - LH2         Date: 12 September 2016

Learning Area: Writing

Learning Observed

Language features, e.g. similes, are used to give our writing impact.  A simile is when a person or object is compared with another object by using the word ‘as’ or ‘like’.  Darren has been learning how to use a simile in his writing.  The Black Gibbons worked together to brainstorm some similes, then I invited them to use similes to describe the colours of the rainbow. Darren participated in the group brainstorm and discussion, then used some of the ideas from our brainstorm to create his own poetic piece about rainbows.   After writing his draft, he then proceeded to publish his writing and illustrate it; using the correct colours and sequencing as in a rainbow.

Evidence of learning

Key Competencies/Vision Principles

Darren is demonstrating that he is: Collaborative by sharing his ideas with his hapu group during a brainstorm session about rainbow colours. Capable of identifying the most suitable object to compare with each rainbow colour in his similes. Using Language, Symbols and Text by taking care to copy the information from his draft when publishing his work.  The size and shape of most letters are formed correctly. .

Next Learning Steps

Look for similes in the books that you are reading Help another Learner to understand how to use similes in their writing Share this learning at home

Darren's Writing Narrative

Learner: Darren                Learning Coach: Mr Dyer                        Date: Week 3 - Term 1

Learning Area: Writing

Learning Observed

We have hit the ground running and are already challenging ourselves to identify what makes writing effective and how we can capture this learning in our own writing. We have identified that our best writing comes from the heart and involves sharing our thoughts, wonderings and feelings about a particular subject. We have also begun exploring ‘Show’ not ‘Tell’ to develop imagery and depth in our writing, along with writing about our sensory responses to daily events. Finally, through selecting elements of Who, What, Why, When, Where and How, we can focus on different elements of our writing in more detail. Darren has begun to use some of the above writing techniques to make their writing #Oresome! He has the opportunity to write every day, and is involved in our author’s circles where they can seek advice and share their writing with myself and other learners. They are also invited to respond to areas for development at various stages of the writing process. It will be exciting to see how their writing develops over the course of the year starting from the example below which was one of their first pieces of independent writing.    On a Friday, Darren contributes to our group blog. We share our thoughts, wonderings and feelings about the previous week and collaborate with the other writing groups before posting on our habitat blog. Be sure to check out these blogs when you can.

Evidence of learning

This was Darren’s first effort at writing this year. It will be exciting to see how he progresses as the year goes on.

Key Competencies/Vision Principles

Thinking - Making sense of information, experiences and ideas. Using language, symbols, and texts - Making sense of words, numbers and images. Managing self - knowing when to lead, when to follow and when to act independently. Relating to others - Interacting effectively in a range of contexts. Participating and contributing - Being actively involved in school and the community Curious Collaborative Connected Capable Darren has begun to show his capabilities in writing even at this early stage of the year. We are connecting with events from our lives to make writing real to us. We are doing a range of independent writing and more collaborative pieces.

Next Learning Steps

Darren should continue to write from the heart and visit the Author’s circle for regular input into his writing. He is encouraged to share their writing with family members and also with other audiences at school and home.This will give him a chance to receive authentic feedback that can be used to make their next piece of writing even better.

Narrative Assessment - Literacy: Writing Term 2

Learner: Darren                     Learning Coach: Abby Morgan              Date: 22 June 2015

Learning Area:  Literacy - Writing

Learning Observed

As part of our writing programme we have been exploring different forms of writing. This week we viewed a video of a baby bird hatching and had to describe what happened. We brainstormed ideas before watching and wrote down all the words that we thought would be useful for our writing. After watching the video we added new words to the list and then shared ideas. Darren was excited and engaged as he watched the video and was able to tell me about what had happened. Darren was able to write a sentence describing what happened in the video and used three of the words we had brainstormed. He was able to locate the words in the list and correctly spell these in his writing. Darren is making progress with his writing and is attempting more words and is able to identify the main sounds in these.

Evidence of learning

Two examples of Darren’s writing. I wonder if he enjoys writing at home?

Key Competencies/Vision Principles

Darren has displayed the Vision Principle of capable as he develops new learning skills and behaviours. He is also demonstrating his ability to use the key competency of using language, symbols and text as he shares his ideas and thoughts through written language. Darren applies his existing knowledge with new learning which demonstrates his ability to use the Key Competency of thinking.

Next Learning Steps

Assist in learning to correctly use full stops and capital letters Introduce Darren to the high frequency word games and activities Publish his favourite stories on his Blog to share with home