Narrative Assessment - Writing - 22 September 2016

Learner: Darren       Learning Coach: Megan Croll - LH2         Date: 12 September 2016

Learning Area: Writing

Learning Observed

Language features, e.g. similes, are used to give our writing impact.  A simile is when a person or object is compared with another object by using the word ‘as’ or ‘like’.  Darren has been learning how to use a simile in his writing.  The Black Gibbons worked together to brainstorm some similes, then I invited them to use similes to describe the colours of the rainbow. Darren participated in the group brainstorm and discussion, then used some of the ideas from our brainstorm to create his own poetic piece about rainbows.   After writing his draft, he then proceeded to publish his writing and illustrate it; using the correct colours and sequencing as in a rainbow.

Evidence of learning

Key Competencies/Vision Principles

Darren is demonstrating that he is: Collaborative by sharing his ideas with his hapu group during a brainstorm session about rainbow colours. Capable of identifying the most suitable object to compare with each rainbow colour in his similes. Using Language, Symbols and Text by taking care to copy the information from his draft when publishing his work.  The size and shape of most letters are formed correctly. .

Next Learning Steps

Look for similes in the books that you are reading Help another Learner to understand how to use similes in their writing Share this learning at home